won't you follow me backwards in time
to the day we first found our hello's
pristine, there in the halo
untarnished, reflecting the sun
and all it's splendor
radiant
remember with me the quiver
heart stopping shimmer, I do
spasms of smiles from the inside out
a flurry of fervor about
the time of the utterance
the time of that first breath
floating on billows of chance
and we flew
oh! where did that vibrancy go?
as I stand here watching my shadow
listening to rumors,
craving your comfort
wary of whispers that scream ...
( by: ajs.02/07/2008)
13 comments:
So true is the imagery of this fabulous poem. It touched my soul and I'm feeling that way too so I had to respond. Thinking of you always.
Paterika
http://www.poetrynest.blogspot.com
Thank you my special friend.. ((((hugs )))) alisa ;-)
Posted by: whitby
good work
Posted by: LEXICON
I think the essence of this poem is very beautiful
I really like it
Posted by: deckard
'wary of whispers that scream' that line cinched a 5! Clever and
distinct style! D
Posted by: Dawn
I enjoy your word usage...there is more to you than meets the eye.
Posted by: alisajs
Thank you, Dawn for your most perspective comments.. I will be by
soon.. alisa ;-)
Posted by: irjasen
i enjoyed reading it and your choice of words...just why the ... at
the end
Posted by: alisajs
... so you can fill in the blanks.. thanks for your comments..alisa
;-0
Posted by: magpie1
I agree with deckard, 'wary of whispers that scream' is a brilliantly
emotive line.
Loving your words!
Posted by: alisajs
Thank you again,
I will be by soon...
alisa ;-)
It just the feeling i have had and cant quite understand why we drift into love and out again, where did it go? why arnt we still there? will I ever find one true love? is there something wrong with me? is true LASTING love real or do i just hope it is? Do I spend time worryng about this or just give up trying, drift from lover to lover giving and being hurt, accepting my fate to have to spend time alone not relishing the thought of my own company and the hollow feeling of needing to give to feel complete. I question my own motives, am i selfish to want this, am i just using my loves to feed my own desires, am i hurting them as much as i feel hurt, or are we ment to exchange ideas, love, some special message and move on, is this our natural course, and those stuck in long term relationships are not moving forward, just stagnant unevolvindg souls.
Hello Craig,
You bring up some great points... I am of the opinion that the two participants have to continually walk in the spirit of gratitude for and about each other...along with having a great mutual respect for each other... and remembering, exactly what it was that made that one so special... in the beginning... make sense?
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