It’s this kind of
love, I want to know
more
about.
Won’t you share your life
and dreams with me?
If I asked in a very diplomatic way
would that naked question
stand out?
The mere thought of you
fuels an inner passion previously
placed aside.
Harder now
to decry,
With each passing flame
and scorching refrain
I press my way and yet
you,
fill my waking days with thoughts of
tortured sweet relief
for only two.
How can we deny
this delicious appetite
between me and you?
Unconscionable …
(04/04/2009.ajs)
25 comments:
Jenee
Wonderful poem! i especially love the line:
How can we deny this delicious appetite between me and you?
Never heard it put that way before!
05-Apr-2009
Aloha Jenee,
Thank you for your comments and for stopping by.
Wouldn't you agree with me that love is indeed a delicious appetite shared by two?
I do...
alisa ;-)
GlennMcCrary
Sounds like forbidden fruit well written. :)
05-Apr-2009
Hello Glenn,
Thank you for your comments as always.
I wouldn't say forbidden but rather completely enticing to put it mildly!
~ ! lol ! ~
aloha,
alisa
05-Apr-2009
alaverdy: your poem is very beautiful (as usual). to tell the true i don't like reading poems about love as i always compare them with Pushkin's, but this one is a rare exception though you sometimes lose rhymes in it.
05-Apr-2009
Hello iverhyck,
Thank you for the kind compliment.
Just so you know, I generally write in free style so my poetry doesn't necessarily rhyme.
I am glad you enjoyed it, though..
Wishing for you a great weekend.
alisa
05-Apr-2009
gwendolen_09
i like this poem its simplistic and pretty. one thing- decry... did you mean decree? i think thats a spelling error, otherwise good work!
05-Apr-2009
Hello Gwendolyn,
Thank you for your comments and time. Sometimes the most profound emotions can be expressed by using the simplest of terms.
As for the word decry, that is the correct word, both in context and spelling.
Look and see>de·cry (d-kr)
tr.v. de·cried, de·cry·ing, de·cries
1. To condemn openly.
I will be by soon.
alisa
05-Apr-2009
J. Maw
the beauty of the free form remains in your realm of sovereignty. i thank you for your sincerity and thanks for sharing yourself in your comment to my poem "My Angel".
05-Apr-2009
Hello J.Maw,
Thank you for your kind comments.
Your lady is a very lucky lady, indeed as referenced by your beautiful poetry.
alisa ;-)
05-Apr-2009
Deckard
I love the way your pieces often become a melding of poetic flow and your half of a conversation with someone. It is beautifully natural. 'Fill my waking days with thoughts of tortured sweet relief.'
05-Apr-2009
Hello Deckard,
Thank you for taking the time to stop by and for your comments. They are deeply appreciated as always.
'Tortured sweet relief'...
*sigh*
My waking days are filled with these thoughts...
Can you tell?
~ ! lol ! ~
Sending you wishes for a great week ahead...
alisa ;-)
05-Apr-2009
bankrupt
I always fall short in this category. I love the fact that some of us out there have these feelings.
Great read.
05-Apr-2009
Thank you for the kind compliment, bankrupt
alisa
06-Apr-2009
Vash
Alisa
Another good poem from you
It’s so beautiful the way you describe your feelings here. I love the lines "How can we deny this delicious appetite between me and you" I can so relate to this poem,we share the same feelings here. good job
TC
vAsH
06-Apr-2009
Hello Vash,
Thank you for your kind words.
I will be by soon,
alisa
06-Apr-2009
hi alisa
at the core this piece offers such a delectable invitation that it would be foolish to resist.to the hardest of hearts this piece would be an offer not easily refused.well penned as always
hope you have a glorious day
cheers
hellfire
06-Apr-2009
Hello hellfire,
Thank you for your comments as always. I do appreciate you and your time...
Sending you wishes for a glorious day as well...
alisa ;-)
07-Apr-2009
wordsmith
Dear Alisa
I concur with Mr Fire. No man would be able to resist such a naked request. Once again well done.
06-Apr-2009
Hello wordsmith,
Thank you for your comments and suggestion. I am on my way...
alisa
06-Apr-2009
Wordplaya
I agree that it is a totally unconscionable that two people with such a strong physical attraction for each other are letting it go to waste. Agree to disagree and be one again. Life is too short...much too short as we all come to realize one day!
Very awesome!
06-Apr-2009
Hello Wordplaya,
I agree and would add that the attraction is more than physical alone... it is emotional as well as intellectual, too.
What an awesome combination! Wouldn't you agree?
Just sayin'....that's all!
~ lol ~
alisa ;-)
06-Apr-2009
Blackheart
Ahhh Passion is part of life, can be good can be bad, but at the end is part of being human.
Very lovely and strong poem.
07-Apr-2009
thank you, Blackheart.. I do agree.. and how wonderful it is being human!
alisa
07-Apr-2009
I wonder if you are writing this because you are in love, or whether this is how you imagine true love should be.
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