I want you beside me in these night seasons
But more than mere dreams
I need you here with me now,
Time stamps keep ticking on this clock
of our landscape,
Don't tarry my love, too much longer ...
Without you I'm reduced to words on a page, and
These letters can't hold you
These letters can't feel,
These letters can only string together
words from my soul...
Twenty four hours is a lifetime
How many lifetimes more?
Until we cross heavens door and
Step into our destiny complete,
I have loved you for lifetimes ...
Need I say more?
by alisajs
08.09.06
9 comments:
The imagery in this poem is rich and that is the way I like free verse. The cadence moves along smoothly with a sensuous rhythmic flow. This poem is loaded with deep love bursting from a lonely heart. I feel the pain in this poem, the pain of waiting to see the love of her life in real time. “Need I say more?” Yes. It would be nice to read “a reply poem” to this one, but then again that would be too nosy on my part. Thank you for the pleasure this poem gave me from reading it.
... Paterika
You're watching the clock again... where it's not needed, and yes I can strongly relate to these words you have written, poetry does show a lot of emotions that we may have hid before, then they are brought to surface by those who read and react, it would be great to hear a voice eh? That's the hardest part I think, awesome done my friend
...Vroom
You're watching the clock again... where it's not needed, and yes I can strongly relate to these words you have written, poetry does show a lot of emotions that we may have hid before, then they are brought to surface by those who read and react, it would be great to hear a voice eh? That's the hardest part I think, awesome done my friend
...Vroom
I must say, either you are tremendously creative or head over heels in Love with what one has to ponder as two-way or one-way street. You express yourself flawlessly, yet there is little as to his responses to your feelings. Wonderful in that it allows the reader to make their own storyline, yet tragic in that even so, we will not know. REMARKABLE!
... DARRYLLADEVINE
I love the title on this one and the prose just follows in step, not too long, sweet and too the point, but yet chocked full of anticipation and longing. I like the reference to 24 hours being a lifetime, and when in love it truly can be an eternity to be apart, i like the way you have conveyed that here, you romantic you...watch out for those killer coconuts..lol, (actually, I love coconuts!)
... AmunetsApple
Very original form....quite cool...Twenty four hours "is" a lifetime and where there is a lacking there is an empty heart hoping..
I hope you find the time for a lifetime and
someone that wouldn't tarry when it comes to the words from your soul...but "would they you wait for you if they knew you were the one". Heavens door is only the beginning
...the rest is what makes love worth the wait. Anyway I thought this was great plus one!!
...PJM
Can I get some of your inspiration please? You just keep churning these out...I can barely keep up! I know that each time I visit your page, there will be a new one! Amazing! I love the whole idea of time stamps! Very original! And I love the idea of loving someone for lifetimes, knowing their soul from a former life...very romantic and beautiful thought.
... violetcove
Very nicely written poem. The author really did a nice work here and it should be respected. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing.
... Poet Mind
Nicely done write this is, the flow and rythem are great, the rythem is good also. This seems well thought out and penned
... Canoebird2
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