You entice me, so
More than I want to say,
Yet, I know that you know ...
I can feel you here
All around my heart,
If the truth be told
Tantalized divergence ...
Meet me in my dreams tonight
Where we'll dine by Orion's star kissed lights,
Won't you let slide a little closer?
I want to feel that spark
Mingle with this maiden's desire ...
by: alisajs
4 comments:
beautiful shorter poem here my friend, lying 'neath the stars for infinite hours of due enjoyment... one word may be missing: "Won't you let (me) slide a little closer?" --other than that it's a magical poem where the heart always has and always will love its other half, awesome done!!
Nice work on this view of the enticing of love from one to another, a leading of one into the dreams of another's desires...very nice...
might want to take a look at line3 in part 2 seems a bit off....(let me slide)...
nice work though and an enjoyable poem to read....
...Art Sun
hi poetess, well written I like the style without a date I would have said early american good word usage and you created a very wistful and anticipatory writing..very good thanks for sharing:))luke6
... Luke6
Tantaized divergence...star kissed lights...
mingle with this maidens desire... such imagery and eloquence wrpped up in such creativity... BRAVO!!! One Heart!
Peace Be, Ozzie D.
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