At the end of the day, when all is said and done
It's you, the one I'm thinking of,
It's you, I want right here with me
Forever and always,
To hold so close
To love so deeply
To share so profoundly
This experience called life ...
The discovery of uncharted waters
We've yet to find,
Watching priceless memories unfold ...
My love for you is constant
Unchanged by winds of fate,
Undaunted with my knowledge of you
Excited to have this chance,
To share your world and dreams
To be there by your side,
To greet each morning with a kiss
of sunlight in your eyes,
To end each day wrapped in your love
Together as we drift to worlds yet seen
Still waiting there for us,
Just beyond that shrouded veil
The one we'll step right through,
With the magic key
of our eternal love ...
by:ajs
20 comments:
when you write of love, and sharing love, one word comes to mind: soulmate. indeed; the very manifestation of that word is encompassed in the feeling you describe so eloquently. well done my friend. God bless, and write on.
... jdmaloy
As always - touch the dream hold it tightly, give it breath and watch it fly...the dove ...soaring against the velvet sky of dreams.
it's 3:20 am..*grin* and that chocolate melted in my mouth and made me smmile.. of course the company helped.
... manekir
This is FIRST MAYBE?
Any way! Your poem is how I feel. You can yell at me and that is ok.
I need that more than a kiss at times.
As long as I know it was a nice one.
You do up nice poem here!
I could review all day!
LOVE ~ DENNY
...ilovecatsokd
Wow!! this is so romantic. such a sweet and tender piece indeed. you can just feel loves engery racing through each masterfully chosen word. as the warmth from your heart radiates softly, the genuine sincerity of you love for this special someone just embraces the reader etching an everlasting image into our hearts and minds. Fantasitc write. Love David
Here is yet another beautiful one, Alisa. Your words hold a certain magic, a certain appeal...I think this must be what we all want deep inside...to be loved unconditionally, faults and all forever and always.
... violetcove
That's good, you create a nice piece...full of contentment and wishful imagery. What you state is more along the lines of the obvious(to find eternal love); because most everyone seeks such an outcome. Nevertheless...this one works very well. Nicely done!
... BMD
magical, moving words that never fail to once again restore the hope of one day finding that perfect counterpart no matter how many times the heart has been abused and abandoned. No matter how many times that dream has faded to stark reality. Just beyoon that shrouded veil...we cannot be afraid to pull that veil aside once again.
... towenstark
hat a lovely, poetic description of that elusive little thing called love...The beat/rhythm almost sounded sing-song in my head while reading...It's obvious to all who read that you are in love with a mate and life! Lovely, enviable optimism conveyed here and a sense of youth and hope as well...Very nice writing and poem...
... linda hart
Beautifully Written!!
To Love someone through all the difficulties..
All the past memories..
"Just beyond that shrouded veil"
Is the Truest of Love.. Because you share..
" the magic key of our eternal love ..."
Guess you know I UNDERSTAND this one!! hehe
Excellent!!
Bravo!! SMILE
... ilaurenloves
Oh how lovely, the message that your heartbeat drums out is always of passion and love Alisa! They don't call you the Pacific Goddess of Love for nothing, well, I do anyway, tehe... Well done doll!/Chris
... MacCyan3@aol.com
This is a beautiful, well written poem, that stirred emotions deep within me....very easily read and understood...thank you for sharing
... bush1
aahhh, this one has such a soothing feel to it my sis. It is lovely and wraps the reader in the essence of love itself. Beautiful job as always....love Rene'
I will catch up in a few days, have been unexpectedly out of town for a week...
... rnprl2003
This type of poetry always amazes me as it highlights the differences that exist between the genders. Men don't look that deep into a another person's phyche.
...amblinal
k then you can have my heart anytime! Beautiful poem! The emotions were overpowering and were right on the mark. Wonderful poem, thank you so much for posting it.
... Ely Boy
I am a really romanticised by these wonderful words, I see sparkling sunlight as I walk these woods of exquisite emotion, wish I, that I were this damsel`s consort` well done
...Linius
This was nice. It had a good flow to it. It kept the readers attention. Not an easy task. I think you did a good job with this one.
... write_2_me
Lovely. Makes one want that kind of love..
Beautifully written. Sending best of wishes to you.. Hoping you are well and happy.
MM aka Rose
... MysteryMys
Okay I'm the negatvie creep I guess...but this just seemed like wedding vows to me...and that has a time and place I guess, but its been done and then some. Don't get me wrong I sincerely hope your feeling this...that's great but as a piece of writing the imagery needs something...THOUGH I really enjoyed To share your world and dreams
To be there by your side,
To greet each morning with a kiss
of sunlight in your eyes,...that is just KILLER....overall a decent job...cheers!
...moussei
This poem is fabulous. It has a good flow and imagery. I think it’s written for the reader can understand on many levels. It’s a very well written poem that was an enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing. Katz
... crazicat
That was beautiful! Yes, you have created a very lovely piece! Thankyou for sharing it with us all here, I enjoyed reading it!!!!!!
... Akira_1
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