Having wrestled with the sins of summer
I should have known the signs
Listened to that other mind
The one we turn away on days like that,
The snowman rolled and spoke
Sweet sounds fell from his lips of twist
I should have walked away,
Enchanted, I chose to stay and hear one more delicious remedy
Feel one more sensational rhapsody,
Before the dreaded epiphany
I knew and still I craved,
As I laid those song sheets down
Heard before this day would turn
As the ground swell fell away,
Dropped along the beaten path
The well-worn rasp
Of listen, fool
Be wise,
Wake up, it’s dinner-time,
And with those sheets still out to dry
When did you try blind?
This is no time for such crazy thoughts
Cleverly, or otherwise …
(8.18.08.ajs)
13 comments:
Posted by Melanie Arnold on 08/18/08 at 06:29 PM
love blindness is sheer hell....but i loved the poem.....take care, mel
Thank you, Melanie...
alisa ;-)
Posted by George Hoerner on 08/18/08 at 07:01 PM
We've all been there m'lady. Choosen to ignore the reality but hopeful that this time.... We've dreamed the fairytale followed our foolish heart but better to have loved and los.... than to never.... nice write Alisa.
Thank you, George. I love reading your comments and thoughts.
alisa ;-0
Posted by: DJMedina/
nice poem i really like this
Posted by: HelenBev
Well if I understand the poem correcly it is brilliantly written had
to read it a few times before I grasped.
thank you
Posted by: deckard
The flow of this piece is perfect and the snowman reference is a bit
of brilliance. Make this one a 6!
*blushing now*
thank you, thank you, thank you!
sincerely,
alisa ;-)
the first leading lines is ahhhhhhhhhhhh :) not awwwwwwwww how cute , but ahhhhhhhhhhhhh i just died...lol..shoulda would coulda why didn't I? as I laid those song sheets down, loved that line...and ground swell, I think i've felt that swallow me feeling,
this feels like a proverbial kick in ones own butt, a boot up the arse, a "what you be thinking with girl" poem...
Posted by Robin on Aug 19, 2008 5:53 AM
you don't say?
lol
duh..
I know, I know... I know... or at least should have known?
would have known if I were really paying attention???
could have known?
the realization after the fact is profoundly bittersweet.
and stings!
thanks, Robin
alisa ;-0
Posted by aj on Aug 19, 2008 7:57 am
been there too mi amor that is why you are going to marry me ! men suck! we'll most men suck, some men are glorious, i have to be fair , why! why must we be fair ? Love is never fair! lol..ah hell...
Posted by Robin on Aug 19, 2008 11:28 AM
!!! lol !!!
You are way too funny... thanks for the compliment.
Although I must admit... I only swing one way!
!!! lol !!!
Man + Woman = bliss
alisa ;-)
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