I am calling to you, can you hear?
Patiently and quietly where you left me
Full of seductive memories,
Here with my friends, we're waiting
Anticipating those good times again,
I know we're out of the way, but it's O.K.
We're used to the dark, no worries
Stop for a moment and reflect with me, please
When your eyes gazed upon
When your senses knew what came next,
How your heart beat double-time
As the match with eager fingers, lit
Flash of silver glint,
Remember? Ah Yes! ...
Feel me all through your soul
As you rush with me, heavenly
Ecstasy pounding your head,
You've got to have more
Just one more taste ...
Release me and let me know you again
I want you to need me more than before
I've been waiting so long, just for you,
Feel your desire, haunted
Tell me how much you've missed this,
I'm alive when you crave me
I know you want to,
I promise I'll never let go ...
by:ajs
8 comments:
This one still reminds me of chocolate...It is the only vice I have left, except for the occasional glass of wine or rum....love the site, my friend.
Tara
Chocolate... this can most definitely be a craving that consumes completely..lol..
This poem is about addiction... of the worst kind...
Although, in reality... a love addiction can be just as deadly... thank you, Tara for your time.. I do appreciate you.....;-)
This is a well written poem with magnificent poetics, rich imagery with a smooth flowing rhythmic cadence. The poem is all about a social issue of global significance. This issue is all about nicotine addiction and the many problems encountered when trying to quit the smoking habit. This contention is support by the persona as she utters these words:
As the match with eager fingers, lit
Remember? Ah Yes! ...
Feel me all through your soul
As you rush with me, heavenly
Ecstasy pounding your head,
You've got to have more
Just one more taste...
I like the seductive tone in which the persona speaks on this social ill which could other wise be boring if the persona had delivered the message via a didactic approach. The seductive overtones of the poem captured my interest from start to finished, while at the same time, my thoughts remained with the ill effects of tobacco smoking on the human body. So in a way this poem provided pleasurable reading and at the same time, delivered a serious message with a romantic flair. Oh, I love what you have done to me lady, with this poem. Thank you very much for sharing your versatility and artistry.
...Paterika
Ya I heard some thing.
I had to see if you did poem!
And I came here and WA LA!
You did another nice one!
HUGS!
LOVE ~ SUNDAY!
My mind is not working with all it's cylinders right now but I enjoyed your poem.
To me you have purposely left some things vague to be filled in by the one it is intended for. I think you want to be a woman of directness and mystery, until you are either sure of yourself or until the conditions are right to reveal your feelings more openly.
... bluemax
Wow! this is quite an impressive write. I could feel the sexual energy just flowing though my body as i read each word penned. drawing me in with your first words. leaving wanting more. the ending is so enlightening not to mention most brilliant. I really enjoyed it....David
As you rush "with"..or "through" me. they each have their own imagery but I felt like "through" completed that stanza with a better visual...Once again, a very passionate plea...what be the hiden meaning ..seeing as we spoken in terms of branchingout : )
...pjm
Very seductive and sensual piece here. I had to get a glass of water when I was done. Made me want to be in that picture replacing whoever the dude is. Also made me think of lovers long ago and the magic we shared. You have a way...t
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